![tatersthezebra:
reasoningwithvampires:
tatersthezebra:
Some of these nit picking things are hilarious but this one IS stupid. I mean obviously the commenter has never been severely pissed off before. When you’re in rage, it takes everything you have not to fight when every part of you wants to. Why not comment on the fact that she’s using a modifier or the sentence itself DRAGS ON into infinity? Or hey, what about the author using passive language with empty words like “were” and “had been” so close together?
Nope, its way more important to comment on how rage effects Edward and why you think it’s wrong. And regarding Bella not breathing, I guess the commenter has never been stressed either. When you’re in an “intense” moment, sometimes you forget to breathe! *legasp*.
If you’re going to crit. Crit on something that makes some freaking sense. Believe me, I’m not trying to defend the author, but I also think this is a clear case of “Let’s make fun of twilight so I can sound cool and get likes and stuff”. *Massive eyeroll* Do your research on anxiety and anger dumbo.
(1) Given the deeply autobiographical nature of the six sentences in my original post, I understand why you thought you knew enough about my emotional history to make sweeping generalizations. As it turns out, I am acquainted with being “severely pissed off.” Unlike you, however, I don’t struggle with how to conduct myself when I’m angry. My rage is locked and loaded. (2) Modifiers do not need to be cauterized. No reader is going to be confused later on and wonder how Edward could perform a cuspid c-section while still gripping a steering wheel. I take no issue with the perpetuity of the modifier. (3) In the sentence, “Edward had been relaxed and joking…” the relaxation and joking are in the past for Bella. Since she was already narrating in past tense, she used the past perfect tense to indicate the action was completed further back in time than the current scene. I have no complaints with that.
(4) I think your indignation is clouding your reading comprehension. I do not think it is important to comment on how rage “effects” [sic] Edward, which is why I didn’t. The original post is commenting on the limitations of first-person narration. I believe Bella could see Edward’s knuckles straining, but I do not believe Bella could determine the goal of strained knuckles with eyesight as her only diagnostic tool. (5) Speaking of Bella’s shortcomings, she is frequently oblivious to her body and her surroundings. Notice how Bella is the only one mentioned in the original post. I do not have a problem with every overwhelmed person; I have a problem with Bella. (6) You should be more careful when you leap to conclusions, because you’re one wild jump from going straight off a cliff. I didn’t make the post to sound cool. I made the post because I have a problem with Meyer’s storytelling. The fact that I sound cool while doing it, that’s just icing. (7) One last thing: I’m familiar with “anxiety” but what is “anger dumbo”?
TL;DR — I can explain it to you, but I can’t understand it for you.
(1) So instead of explaining yourself you chose to attack me verbally? Nice. Good start. This is exactly how you should get me to agree with you if that is your intended goal. I so love it when people berate me. It’s like, my favorite thing.
(2)You’re right, modifiers don’t need to be cauterized but I did read Twilight and I know she uses the HECK out of them and they do slow down a sentence. So I did jump on the assuming boat with that one.
(3) Okay, so why didn’t you just say that? Instead of making a bunch of roundabout comments that didn’t really say anything at all but “I like sounding smart”?
(4) Again, with the insulting. I’ll give you your right to insult, I did call you a dumbo. But your critique just didn’t make sense to me. I apologize for calling you names. But I still don’t think your original critique is a good one.
(5) So that automatically keeps her from noticing the actions of the one person in the world she does think about? You’re not the author, you don’t really get to make those choices.
(6 ) I only leaped to those conclusions because your writing lead me to them. If you’d like to make a post that is more clear, maybe this could be avoided in the future.
(7) Again, sorry. I just don’t like critiques that don’t make sense.
My comprehension’s just fine, your explanations can be worked on though.
Hey, it’s okay, I get it. A troll’s gotta eat, doesn’t it? With what Dana serves up, though, I wouldn’t stray too far from a toilet if I were you…](http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m3eyafS4Os1qd0quuo1_r1_1280.png)
Hey, it’s okay, I get it. A troll’s gotta eat, doesn’t it? With what Dana serves up, though, I wouldn’t stray too far from a toilet if I were you…Some of these nit picking things are hilarious but this one IS stupid. I mean obviously the commenter has never been severely pissed off before. When you’re in rage, it takes everything you have not to fight when every part of you wants to. Why not comment on the fact that she’s using a modifier or the sentence itself DRAGS ON into infinity? Or hey, what about the author using passive language with empty words like “were” and “had been” so close together?
Nope, its way more important to comment on how rage effects Edward and why you think it’s wrong. And regarding Bella not breathing, I guess the commenter has never been stressed either. When you’re in an “intense” moment, sometimes you forget to breathe! *legasp*.
If you’re going to crit. Crit on something that makes some freaking sense. Believe me, I’m not trying to defend the author, but I also think this is a clear case of “Let’s make fun of twilight so I can sound cool and get likes and stuff”. *Massive eyeroll* Do your research on anxiety and anger dumbo.
(1) Given the deeply autobiographical nature of the six sentences in my original post, I understand why you thought you knew enough about my emotional history to make sweeping generalizations. As it turns out, I am acquainted with being “severely pissed off.” Unlike you, however, I don’t struggle with how to conduct myself when I’m angry. My rage is locked and loaded.
(2) Modifiers do not need to be cauterized. No reader is going to be confused later on and wonder how Edward could perform a cuspid c-section while still gripping a steering wheel. I take no issue with the perpetuity of the modifier.
(3) In the sentence, “Edward had been relaxed and joking…” the relaxation and joking are in the past for Bella. Since she was already narrating in past tense, she used the past perfect tense to indicate the action was completed further back in time than the current scene. I have no complaints with that.(4) I think your indignation is clouding your reading comprehension. I do not think it is important to comment on how rage “effects” [sic] Edward, which is why I didn’t. The original post is commenting on the limitations of first-person narration. I believe Bella could see Edward’s knuckles straining, but I do not believe Bella could determine the goal of strained knuckles with eyesight as her only diagnostic tool.
(5) Speaking of Bella’s shortcomings, she is frequently oblivious to her body and her surroundings. Notice how Bella is the only one mentioned in the original post. I do not have a problem with every overwhelmed person; I have a problem with Bella.
(6) You should be more careful when you leap to conclusions, because you’re one wild jump from going straight off a cliff. I didn’t make the post to sound cool. I made the post because I have a problem with Meyer’s storytelling. The fact that I sound cool while doing it, that’s just icing.
(7) One last thing: I’m familiar with “anxiety” but what is “anger dumbo”?TL;DR — I can explain it to you, but I can’t understand it for you.
(1) So instead of explaining yourself you chose to attack me verbally? Nice. Good start. This is exactly how you should get me to agree with you if that is your intended goal. I so love it when people berate me. It’s like, my favorite thing.
(2)You’re right, modifiers don’t need to be cauterized but I did read Twilight and I know she uses the HECK out of them and they do slow down a sentence. So I did jump on the assuming boat with that one.
(3) Okay, so why didn’t you just say that? Instead of making a bunch of roundabout comments that didn’t really say anything at all but “I like sounding smart”?
(4) Again, with the insulting. I’ll give you your right to insult, I did call you a dumbo. But your critique just didn’t make sense to me. I apologize for calling you names. But I still don’t think your original critique is a good one.
(5) So that automatically keeps her from noticing the actions of the one person in the world she does think about? You’re not the author, you don’t really get to make those choices.
(6 ) I only leaped to those conclusions because your writing lead me to them. If you’d like to make a post that is more clear, maybe this could be avoided in the future.
(7) Again, sorry. I just don’t like critiques that don’t make sense.
My comprehension’s just fine, your explanations can be worked on though.
